Matthews

I just wanted to say this was beautiful and I really liked it! Kitty15 pretty much got all the nitpicks Well I’ll confess that sometimes I wonder Take off the ...

I like it. The way you have the line breaks throws me off somewhat while reading it, but as it is meant to be a song, it doesn't matter. Only ...

I loved this, I really did. It was pretty darn awesome :) Couple suggestions: It's a concrete paved out world out there, Scrap metal danglen' though the air. Maybe it ...

Angry shouts and scorching flame I really like this stanza. I think it has to be my favorite out of the whole poem! Pounding feet and steely fangs My bloody ...

It felt too long...more of a story than anything. In fact, if you took this theme and made a short story out of it would probably be more readable, not ...

I think reading this damaged my brain. In fact, I'm positive I'll never be quite the same after such an...interesting experience!!! lol jk, but seriously, I didn't get this at ...

I didn't really get the meaning of this, and usually that's not the case. For then true beauty would be found, which is something saved for the divine, we'd gaze ...

Ooh I loved this!!! It's awesome! I love the meaning behind it and the rhyming was good except in one small place hardly mentionable. :) I forget about the present. ...

Hmm, I liked this, but the repeats of certain phrases bothered me: Faceless. Faceless. Here for example. The repeats seem unnecessary and draw me away from the main point. I ...

I liked this...alot. For me, it's a message many young people should read today. They don't realize what a gift purity is. The last bit, somehow threw me off the ...

Haha I liked this, and I LOVED that it is actually about a boulder!!! This line kinda threw me the "P word" supposed to be pain? It was probably just ...

I like this, but I agree with LilySoulMahon that if it were lengthened and you added more imagery it would be even better. I realize you just randomly put this ...

Wow, this was very emotional and powerful! Great job! That's all part of the art; taking something that happens in life, and exaggerating it and making it something big. Even ...

I like the message it conveys, but I agree it has little imagery, and seems rather forced. In the first two stanzas you overuse the word "finally" it is used ...

I really liked this, it's true, emotional, and well written. It seemed to me that you have interesting breaks in the stanzas, like here: She asks if I'm all right. ...