Master_Yoda

Hi Madcapper, I'm Yoda and would like to welcome you to YWS. I hope you'll both gain a great deal from, and contribute a great deal to the site. Now, ...

Hi Ranger This is an interesting one to review. I feel tempted to comment on the style, but will keep that section brief to allow me to focus on critiquing ...

Hi there, Welcome to YWS, and have a blast of a time. It's a pleasure to meet you. If there's anything I can help with, let me know. Now that ...

You're an awesome storyteller, Skins. I'm sorry it's taken so long to get around to reviewing your piece, but I ran into some unexpected trouble trying to get University applications ...

Hi Lava On the whole I think this is a very nice essay. You come across as a confident and skilled girl. There are a couple of points I'd like ...

Yo Quill I've got to say, you got me floored here. This is one of the best pieces of fantasy I've read on YWS for a long time. Your characters ...

Interesting, Exception. I like your prose's base. It's not too fancy. It's easy to read. It's fast paced. You do need to try to ensure that your grammar is up ...

Wow, Stoney, Very interesting indeed. First things first: Way too confusing. I want dialogue tags! I want dialogue tags! Yep, it takes serious mental strain merely to work out who's ...

Hey Miniauthor, I really want to review this story as I am convinced that you have the capabilities required to become an awesome writer. Still, as per usual, I've got ...

Hey Kara I'm really liking this piece of yours. You have all the elements to a great short story: An amazing world, a brilliantly descriptive dialogue, a heap of tension, ...

Hey Megg, I hate to play around with condescension so, but for thirteen years old you're a great writer. There's a real well of talent floating around YWS these days. ...

Yo Jagg So, we already discussed the fact that I find the story way too unfocused for my liking. First and foremost develop drive. Let's see what we can add ...

Hi there Brooklyn This was quite an interesting piece, I must say. You lay the foundations of what might become a really wonderful story. Well done. :) Firstly, I'd like ...

Hey Salmon :) Let's just say, I rather think you have great potential. I don't know how much value this has as a Short Story, but I would certainly consider ...

Hi there, Wow, I've been out of the reviewing business for a while, but Reviewing Sunday has stepped the pressure up, so I guess I'm here. So, this isn't much ...