MasterChief

Indeed. but its kinda of about not making too much of a fool of yourself. Puking and getting off with your mates girlfriend kinda ruins a party. Though i did ...

Thanks for the critique All those 'its', i checked my word document and they were all correct in mine. Dont know what happened there. Hmm, the naught seemed right to ...

This person hasnt been on this site in months. :/

i like it, though for some reason i got the image of an old wooden house with creaky wooden, well everything really standing on a tall hill in the clear ...

I really don't like the whole sea and tuna fish thing. To be brutally honest in the nicest possible way, it's fluff that needs a lot of reworking.

Hmm, it's nice but i think you just started inserting words just because they rhymed.

i thought it was a pretty good childrens book.

i read this and gave it to my grandma for christmas (she has a degree in religion and theology) and she believed parts of it but i had to tell ...