Mars

Hello Natalie! It's always nice to see more poets on the site. As you've said a few times, this was pretty abstract, which is fine, but let's try and revise ...

Hi Monki! I don't believe we've met before, I am Mars, here for your review. So, I have a few nitpicks, and since I can see this is a very ...

Hello anti-pop! I'm glad to return the favor. I'm not reading everyone else's reviews, so, sorry if I happen to repeat something. Okay! Let's get started. Each moment that passed, ...

You gave us less than a day. Have some patience. That said, I will! Me! Me! :P This is quite an interesting concept-I love the idea of living in a ...

Long-ish? Reaaaallllllyyyyy? I'm going to divide my critique up much the same way as you divided up your chapters, if you don't mind. These will just be first impressions, I'll ...

Hi Manzanna! I quite like what you have here-I love observing people. (And you're lucky! I wish my English teacher would tell us to write short stories!) So, let's start ...

Hey kerryannuhh, and welcome to YWS. I'm here to review your poem, but first I want to tell you that the first rule here is to have 2 reviews done ...

Hi chenka! ktw here to review your piece. First things first; I shall start with your first paragraph :) Then I'll have overall comments/suggestions. (And if I sound harsh, just ...

Hey Night! :) I noticed a few grammar errors in here, and it's really hard to read a story (however good) if it's riddled with mistakes. So I'll go through ...

Hi Vox! Here as you requested - sorry it took so long. Let's start! The first thing I want to say is that proper formatting would make this easier to ...

Demeter! These lyrics are excellent, especially since I can relate to almost everything. Though I've forgot a lot I believe it would be 'forgotten a lot.' But, on the other ...

Hello Hayley! ktw here as requested. Forgive me if I repeat something one of the other reviewers said, but I'm too lazy to read their comments. :) Let's get started, ...

John hunched over his Algebra homework, furiously scribbling and then erasing. His eyebrows were contorted and he mumbled to himself angrily. Hahaha. That sounds just like me. Anyhow, Sakura posted ...

Hi Mistress! Here for your review, as requested. I like your beginning. It gives the reader a very clear picture of the old woman, and it feels calm. So no ...

Cookie! Grammar and Wording! He found little interest in books, as he could barely read or write, though a scullery maid had taught him his letters . But Daniel- this ...