MandaPanda1031

HAHA! The end was very funny and surely not what I was expecting at all! Although, throughout the whole story, I felt like you were just telling. I kind of ...

This needs a lot of work. You aren't going to want the ()'s everywhere. So get rid of them and find a way to work what your trying to say ...

It was writen really nicely, I don't think there's anything wrong with the plot, but you can only get so much out of one page. Anyhow, for someone interested in ...

Your such a good writer, I can't write with dialoge that good. :( Maybe you should teach me. Very interesting story.... It seems like romance or something I didn't catch ...

Underlined-fragments red-corrections blue-my comments Zoey Please, stop... I thought as the car revved along the motorway. Bizarre sounds came from the right of me as Luke continued drumming the steer

Green-Fragment Red-correction blue-my comments Kierra Kiera or Kyra reared on her hind legs, thumping her paws against the trash can. It was not the silver kind she was used to ...

Wow! Very nicely written. I'm eagar to find out why the mom bit the dad. I loved this, and am going to read more. Underline: Fragments Red: Corrections Blue: My ...

Sorry I couldn't figure out how to get the other person's review off of there, so just ignor that . Hey. I'm gonna do a reivew. Underlined : Fragments red ...

Wow, that is a very strange thing to experience. But, you wrote it as a story and it was very interesting. I have copied and pasted you story below and ...

Wow, not something I would've normally read but the title caught me. I really want to know if this is true or not, it feels like you are telling us ...

Lol my cat has the sam name. REVIEW TIME! At first I thought she was a wolf or something, but then I figured out she was a dog. I'm curious ...

I like to review as I go so hear it is and I'll give a general impression when I'm done It's so sad that his own uncle would kick him ...

Beautifully written. I think maybe The woman should tell the daugter the truth about what Daddy does to Mommy and get her out of that home though, just saying if ...

I like to review as I go- so I will write where I am and What I think. P: Paragraph Five P: Very descriptive, no spelling erors. VERY good, athough ...

This was very detailed, so detailed in fact that I could practically see everything the girl in the story was seeing. I LOVED this story. Someday I'd love to see ...