Maki-Chan

Well I like this better then the other one- going home. ^_^

its alright, I guess. It doesn't flow too well.

If you do what the others suggest I think this will be a perfect peom. I like the subject, its interesting. ^_^

they're just random stuff. Once was for my comic The Melon. But it failed. sigh....now its just for your enjoyment.

well its a light snow and it does snow there. Its near by. But not on the outskirts.

wow that must suck to have. I always sleep. In fact i keep having a wierd dream. Its the smae thing every time. For 2 and 1/2 weeks so far ...

hmmmmm..... I like it but I just don't get the message. hmmm... will you tell me later???? Please? :D

not much to correct. Suzanne I think got them all. other wise- WOW. I loved it. Well done. I can't wait for more ^_^

yes the real world. I couldn't remember the name of Ichigo's town. What is it? I think it starts with a K?

I'll fix it up. Also Maki is 15, she lives alone cause she finished school already. She is really smart but acts normal. The boy is Hitsugaya, and he isn't ...

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NOt bad. if you do what the others said to you'll do fine. I rather liked it. Keep it up ^_^

wow. Its interesting. I never thought of eyes like this. Destroying mankind. I like it. ^_^

It was nice, but the rythme thing well was a bit much. Can you change it> If not oh well. I give it a 6/10 needs alittle work .If you ...

i'll fix it up. Of course I know where I am going with this! death. oops. About the needle thing. I have an irrational fear of needles, and strangly when ...