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Very interesting and I like the progression. But like any poem that relies on a fancy little narrative trick, this has problems, because you have to keep that trick up ...

Very interesting. Obviously there will be a story, correct? :)

You're reaction is actually the desired one! It is a satire,maybe of the things you said, but definitely a satire of something...thanks for the feed back!

Corona was winona'a original name and I decided to change it and must have left one, thank you for finding that and please point it out for me! The marks ...

THIS is hysterical realism - the concrete setting, the discernible characters, the mating of the absurd prose (Pynchon-esque dialogue) and the journalistic study of life. You have a very lively, ...

Hey I'm going to give a detailed review of this after I read the rest of this, but I just wanted to say one thing, definitely changed the "Pynchon diner" ...

thanks! see it! now! haha, just kidding...(see it!)

thanks! see it! now! haha, just kidding...(see it!)

Yah, its definitely a bad thing that the spirit has died out...

I mispelled taught as "tought" SO STUPID AHHHHHH!!!!!!

"the Babe" refers to babe ruth, the baseball player. Here i use him as a symbol for the true American spirit, or for americana (whatever you want to refer to ...

just call me a romantic

Thank you both, and yah, the rhymes are kind of arkward, but so was she (and so am I) that's the idea...

Thank you guys very much, such kind words should only be repaid with unmitigated scorn. Just kidding.

HEY! YOU SHOULD SUBMIT THIS TO PUBLICATION!