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Really cool, though you are missing a period at the end of the second stanza-it's something new that I've never seen, taking a modern speech and a biblical passage and ...

I liked this, and I think it would work very well as a song, with the repetition of the first line at the end... I thought the ending was very ...

I like it, but I spotted some problems: "In early morning, before the sun rose, a wicked stepmother creeps through the dark"---"rose," and "creeps" are two different tenses "A glass ...

"Are you going to make me dress up as a pokemon?"--why do I feel like Delainie has been taking MDMA, street name Ecstasy? Anyway, I usually don't enjoy stories like ...

Though I understand what you are saying, your poem doesn't really make an impact on my feelings, I think it is the, I'm being blunt, elementary rhyme scheme that sorda ...

I liked this, and I think if you can revise it then you definitely should read it, but it needs some work-I'm not a close enough reader to just tell ...

I don't think that there is anything wrong with having separate religions-the main rules of all religions are the same, that life is beautiful, that God is powerful, that nature ...

"56. Meet Morgan Freeman (Hopefully he'll last that long!)" Better get moving on that one, Im just saying that the dude is old. Why would you want to meet him ...

You are the best. :) I don't say this much, but I really liked this. "Your moist hands (are) like rain playing on my skin. (comma) Scratching (lower case--but does ...

EDIT, EDIT, EDIT-the spelling, punctuation, EVERYTHING. Your writing flows well, don't lose that, or I will have to do to you whatever is being done to the chick in this ...

This is interesting, I don't really know what's happening, but that doesn't matter. Really strong, though you may want to hold back on the tone and let me figure out ...

No insult intended, it's obvious you're a beginner, so I'm going to treat you like one. First things first, you need to stop repeating her name so much, and you ...

Though the writing is impressive, I don't really have much interest in the story or have felt connected to it at all-I feel that you think I'm stupid while reading ...

I like this, it does a great job of catching what you are feeling and paints a great picture with the crowd metaphor, but it does need some revision, and ...

I think you should break this up into a line form, instead of a paragraph form-that type of structure just seems to make it longer and harder to stay with, ...