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Re: The Flames will Rise again
I'm not sure if you're serious or sarcastic. This isn't a poem by the way. Are you sure this wasn't meant for another topic?
Jun 17, 2013 -
Re: Assasins! Assasins! Part 1
Always make sure that readers know how many characters are in a scene and who they are, as well as what they are doing there. Always check that it is ...
Jun 4, 2013 -
Re: Assasins! Assasins! Part 1
First off, thank you. And yes, I know there is an entire section in italics. That was a mistake by the word processor I used. "Not much happening at the ...
Jun 4, 2013 - Re: Pokemon Ultimate Evolution: Episode 4, Tracey's Introduction May 26, 2013
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Re: Pokemon Ultimate Evolution: Episode 4, Tracey's Introduction
As far as Pokemon fan-fiction goes, it's pretty good, but you need to check your spelling. I was going to copy and paste it, but there were almost too many. ...
May 26, 2013 -
Re: The Lady's first Fall
One more thing. EloquentDragon, I know I stated that I didn't take this one very seriously, but even with my bad stuff I'd like some critique on the story. If ...
May 26, 2013 -
Re: The Lady's first Fall
Thank you very much the both of you. "First off---tone down on your language. I realize that this is supposed to sound %u201Cgritty%u201D and %u201Crough,%u201D but it can get old, ...
May 26, 2013 -
Re: Third Line Pulse, Chapter One
Pretty good man. The description was very vivid. I'm not one for mystery novels, but this was alright. The dialogue felt genuine, but I think it could use more work. ...
May 25, 2013