MRHILL92

I'm not sure if you're serious or sarcastic. This isn't a poem by the way. Are you sure this wasn't meant for another topic?

Always make sure that readers know how many characters are in a scene and who they are, as well as what they are doing there. Always check that it is ...

First off, thank you. And yes, I know there is an entire section in italics. That was a mistake by the word processor I used. "Not much happening at the ...

As far as Pokemon fan-fiction goes, it's pretty good, but you need to check your spelling. I was going to copy and paste it, but there were almost too many. ...

One more thing. EloquentDragon, I know I stated that I didn't take this one very seriously, but even with my bad stuff I'd like some critique on the story. If ...

Thank you very much the both of you. "First off---tone down on your language. I realize that this is supposed to sound %u201Cgritty%u201D and %u201Crough,%u201D but it can get old, ...

Pretty good man. The description was very vivid. I'm not one for mystery novels, but this was alright. The dialogue felt genuine, but I think it could use more work. ...