Lycando

Ugh that came out wrong, it's (quote) (/quote), but replace the ( ) with [ ]

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Wow! Really liking it, more clarity given on the back story and the character's experience now. I like how you gave the plugged in state the 'Cognito', sounds very apt ...

24 hours prior to Review Day each new work posted doesn't cost any point at all. So even with 0 points you could submit your story.

Oh but how the title relates to the "content" though...still it's kinda a waste nothing was actually written.

he's in a dream then? That explains all the uncertainty and vagueness. Looking forward to the other chapters!

The BB code for quoting is YOUR TEXT HERE . You have to manually copy the text though.

How does one get the last type of boob? But great poem! Loving it! :D

You can edit your work directly from here, no need for another post :)

The breathing box was the inhaler. I have a feeling Jim here is asthmatic :P

Thanks for the nitpicks, I should have proof read it beforehand I guess :P

Huge tip here, post this chapter by chapter. No one in their right mind will review a whole story at once.

I was trying to bring the reader more into the characters thoughts and feelings. Thus the lengthy sentences. I do realise now that I re read it the pace seems ...

Thanks! Will take into account what you said!

No problem! This story could definitely be developed much more. It kinda reminds me of Life of Pi though. XD