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Good translation, quite difficult to review though as it's not your own work. I liked the song though. Do you plan to write anything original or are you hoping to ...

Thank you so much, you're a very kind reviewer! I would definitely recommend the movie- I loved it! (Hence why the first fan fiction I've ever written is about that ...

Hey thanks for the review! "Ignore me if this seems silly but considering as I haven't read the first chapter that will be true of some of my future comments ...

Cute poem, but isn't it "flurple", not "fluple"? Also, I think Turtle rhymes with Purple ;)

Thank you so much :)

@ytejas Ah yes, the elongated sentence problem that I always have! When I wrote this last night (despite the fact I edited it) I still had James Earl Jones reading ...

Thanks for everyone's comments! I have now had a re-edited version of this PUBLISHED!! :D

Thank you so much to both of you :)

@Griffinkeeper I took your advice and removed the swaring at last. Thanks for the advice!

Thanks so much everyone. I added a note about the strange structure.

I guess if you're terrible at keeping secrets, it's best to just go ahead and say so, eh? Haha. I liked this, as I liked its sequel. It's a little ...

You have some capitalization issues and line breaks in weird places, but maybe you intended it that way? I did indeed intend it that way :) Thank you for your ...

Thanks for the feedback everyone! I think I wrote this piece far too quickly, I should inject a lot more emotion into this piece! Really wish I'd posted this sooner ...

Thanks for your comment :) I think I'll post another chapter soon (one from nearer the end) as people seem to like the story.

One more thing, you should really review some things yourself! I'm surprsied you were able to post without reviewing things, you have to give a little to get a little ...