LunaBuna43

You can also get in trouble for posting on your own stories so many times Amber. They are considered reveiws and give you unfair points. If you want to discuss ...

Wow OverEasy.... This was great! Stupid little worms, that's what they really are. Pathetic fuzzy sheep parading around, following the trends. Why form their own opinions when the media hands ...

Hello! I love how you had the before and after scenes, really awesome! Only a few problems though... 1) There is no puntuation! 2) And I' m the only one ...

Trystyn! *looks over 'song'* It doesn't make any since... I'm sorry but it doesn't... I'll help you out with my new Alto Sax, kay? And you can play your TRUMPET! ...

Wow. I really liked the entire concept of this. It was really great...despite the few things I'll help you out with in my words below. I looked blankly at the ...

The wind pulled my hair across my face[b], covering my eyes and the tears that rolled down my cheeks.[/b] --coma to seperate them together they just sound wierd The setting ...

I liked this! Alot! I'll post the corrections in bold kay? No more are there knights in shining armor and damsels in distress, but rather deal with life itself. Imagination, ...

Ahh!! The forth part! Awesome! I, myself didn't find anything wrong but... You left me on a cliff-hanger again!! Darn you! Just kidding. Actually I really liked this one to. ...

YAY!!! I'll bold the fixes for you Chris thought it funny that two girls his age would play dress up, but h e also thought it cute that they played ...

Ooh! I like this! Especially this part... The Aris ran deep for several hundreds of miles, mild, emerald. Very rarely did it stir, its dully rippling waves usually tinged with ...

Hey Acoustic! I liked it...even though I was a little...choppy as DR said. Have you actually got out your guitar and tried singing it with the music? I'm no master ...

Ello Cat-sama! Time to get to work I guess!! I'll crit as I read. Beams of sunlight pierced the sparse clouds, highlighting the shimmering pelts of BurnClan cats stretched out ...

Ello again Kitty! First of all take the bold off. It's very distracting and it hurts my eyes. It is extremely short for the first chapter and their is way ...

Yes! Awesome! Hilarious! My family was over my shoulder at the time I read it and they started laughing. One thing though that I agree with Moving Forward...you do put ...

Helloo Again!! I'm going to crit as I read!! 8) Evelyn’s Mother fussed over her obsessively Right her it should be Evelyn's m cap on M in mother Hope that ...