LoyalDay

Thanks this actually help with my sentence structure!

Thanks for the review. I actually haven't decided if I want it to be a prologue or the beginning of chapter one. I really don't do well with stories that ...

Thanks for review. I know it's very short since right now, I just wanted to see what people thought of it. I plan on expanding more on in the near ...

This actually is a lullaby and thanks for your review :)

I was thinking of writing something like for a couple of days but after listening to some instrumental music, I just decided to write it with the first thing that ...

Thanks. Yeah I tried to place them into stanzas but this is how it keeps turning out. You think I should put like this %u27A1"~" in between them or would ...

Cool, I'll check those out

Dude, you should totally post poetry on here.

The both of you actually did a wonderful job, though hope you keep writing.

Okay, I'm just going to say one thing. Make this a book. I just love the concept of hair changing color based on mood. Not sure what you would do ...

Thanks for reading :) and for pointing out my spelling mistakes. But honesty I doubt it would even sell...

Thanks for the tips and honestly there was no plot for this story because it was more like a parable... I guess.

I really like the poem, as it was sweet and very truthful, however it was kind of hard to tell where there is a pause. A nice coma between words ...

The diction in this piece is really good, that I really like the way you form them into sentences. I also really like the storyline and events that happened in ...