Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
How many days past since his death? Five or seven. They don't seem that long...but death can change people. Mom won't get out of bed. Jessie refuses to acknowledge his existence and dad...hasn't been home. Mourning for a loved one is natural but I just can't be sad that he's gone. I love...loved...my little brother but whenever I think about him (or even pass his room), I get a weird, uncomfromable feeling. My palms get sweaty, a lump forms in my throat and I find myself with my guard up.
Hmm...well this is a pretty emotional piece here. Its certainly not the biggest of the lot, but even though there's so few words here, you've really done a pretty good job of bringing in some powerful emotions here. Its a very simple idea that you focus on and I think you manage to deliver on said idea really quite well here as a whole.
I think its especially powerful that you chose to capture the emotions of the entire family here rather than sticking with only the main character. Seeing the more varied forms of grief lends a bit more power to the whole situation I think and on the whole makes this story that much more impactful in bringing across that grief here.
Overall, I think this is a very simple but very powerful story here. You've set out with pretty much one singular goal here with where you want to take this one and I think you pull it off really well here. You've managed to put things together quite well with the reactions of the whole family and then tie it together with the thoughts of the protagonist.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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