Dreamers

Hello, THECATLOVER12345, this is Moonwatcher. If I am correct, this is the last review I will need to get my first star. I read what acm said below, so...I'm not sure how to respond to what could possibly be plagiarism. So, I'll cast that aside. The capitalization and the centering of the poem feels unnecessary. In fact, the poem would be easier to read if it wasn't like that, plus some commas. I like the emotion in the poem. However, the topic of dreams feels so cliché by now, that I can't feel too strong about the poem. You did well, nice job!

I have read this poem in school, and I really liked it. I'm just wondering why you posted someone else's work looking for reviews on it.

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I really like the poem, as it was sweet and very truthful, however it was kind of hard to tell where there is a pause. A nice coma between words would be nice so that I could tell where exactly to take so called pause. Though other than that, I like your use of similies and you repetition. You diction also fits well with the poem. So nice job with the poem

Hello, InfiniteRectangles here with your review!

This will probably be a short review, as this is a short poem. Anyway, this was really sweet! I loved how you compared the absence of dreams to a broken-winged bird and a barren field. That being said, this was rather short. I would have liked to see more of where you were going with this, maybe have a few more descriptions or something, but that is just my opinion. You've captured the emotion really well with such few words, but I think you could strengthen it even more if it were just a tad bit longer.

I noticed a lack of punctuation in your poem as well. You only have two full stops in the entire poem. Lack of punctuation can make a poem feel rushed and disrupt the flow. That wasn't much of an issue for me, because I know how it was supposed to be read, but you might want to add a couple of commas in there to slow down the rhythm a little.

That is all I have for you. You are quite talented and I'm looking forward to reading more of your work. Keep writing and have a wonderful day/night!

P.S. I see that you're relatively new here. Welcome to YWS!

Hi Im here to give you a review!

This is very short and I would love to have to have seen the theme of dreams be more developed, but its still good and I loved it. I do love the imagery, the broken winged bird meaning that the world would be stationary if dreams are absent. Dreams are innovations without them the world doesn't change, it doesn't grow. So I really love how you conveyed the message.

Keep writing because I think you have great potential!

~RS