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This is not mean to hurt anyones feelings or mock them... these town names are real. WELL THIS SHOULDN'T BE! Chapter 1. Here. Can you see a city? The city ...

Howdy ;) I'm Kirsten and I'm going to be your reviewer for today ;) Yay! I love being the first to critique stuff :D The Boy Who Could Have Been ...

I understand it's choppy in some areas but I had to make this short and I was having a hard time with that...hope it's not too awful! I believe it's ...

The clouds seem uncertain today. Beautiful and original way to start. Fantastic. I do agree with Sarah, however, that the second sentence needs to be cut out. It just destroys ...

There. i have edited the chapter. if you still find any problem with it, let me know. Chapter two We rode the bike at city speed limits. I passed blunt ...

Blue, Purple and Red Flash in my face I turn to you and try to keep pace. I slip and fall to the ground, You turn and look around. But ...

-------------------------------------------------------------------------------- This was going to be part one, but really, it's not long enough to make the story into parts, so I'm not going to. Ther

stood outside the rotten, iron gate looking into the old, abandoned manor. It had been at least a decade since I had last been to this house. I wanted to ...

The title drew me in. Let's just say I'm an English geek, as we all are :D Well, I've never reviewed a script hitherto so I'll try be as helpful ...

I couldn’t believe I was doing this. It was stupid, Do you think semi-colons would be better here? eg: idiotic; irrational, and frankly stalkerish idiotic, irrational, and frankly stalker-ish. I’d

was just thinking, and this thought came to me. I don't know if I'll do anythign with it. Critiques are hugely appreciated!! * * * * * * * * ...

Pleasant View, Colorado November of 2002 Everyone thought they had me figured out. Fantastic opening line, so intriguing. I could almost hear their thoughts when I walked into a room… ...

The spacing has to be this way) ( The spacing on microsoft word, when copied and pasted here, makes the spacing all weird, sorry!) ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* A necklace is all th

This is a novel I have just started, set in 1920. I didn't want to put it in historical fiction, though, as it covers multiple genres. If anyone has any ...

I've copied and pasted this here so that I can go back and edit later, I don't have time just now, but later I'll do my review on this post ...