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**cough** Biglongchunksyndrome **cough** Paragraphs, people!

you do realise I wrote this in ten minutes under pressure... don't you?

You stole the name from that Moulin Rouge song!! That, is going to far... I don't think you really need that comma. Plus "to" should be "too"

**cough** full words **cough**

you know. . . I never thought of that. . . XD Thanks for pointing that out, Kayles

Snoink, you're going to have to explain this part to me: And about I have sex with random guys. Perhaps you meant "me having"?

oh, that's so sweet. I am definately looking for that book.

I'll definately have a look for it next time I'm at the library, it sounds great. What do the notes say, though?

I'm not too fond of the beginning, to be honest. It talks about death and drags a little. The brackets are a bit of a pest, too. Also, what are ...

It did

before I start let me just say Im the worst poetry critter that ever roamed this earth. This was cute. There, my crit. LOL

awww such a sweet story, with such a horrific ending. I really enjoyed this, it was ver well written. The only thing I pointed out was "“**ore!” He spat," were ...

yeah and a bit creepy!!

yes, you did miss something. But dont worry, youll find out more as the plot unfolds. **evil cackle**

well I dont know about that. John Marsden manages quite well. And Bryce Courtany.