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it was not! What was begging for you to crit is something crit worthy! Gah! Go crit something -recent-, something I actually -care- about! XD

... Mat, didn't I tell you to leave this alone? **is mad**

This was nice, even though it did press religion a little. I don't know how to crit it properly, because I don't know what it is and so I have ...

Well... this was... odd. Very dialogue dependant, which made it weird and a little irritating. Also, what's meant to be going on? I'm so confused...

Haha, I'm re-writing this whole story, Pingi, so your crit is pretty much useless.

The text message went something like: "Joan, just a quick message to wish you and Brian a Happy Easter and all the best for 1982, from all of us at ...

I'm pretty sure you could've just made this a part of Chapter one, part one.

Tip: un-nessecary poll= big no-no

Ok... The whole "Sean", "Maid" and "Bride" conversation layout is enough to do someone's head in. Try setting it out normally, so readers don't get irritated.

I have read "The Pact", and it is the most heartbreaking book I have ever read. It's about love and loss, and it is the only book to have made ...

The thing about NaNo is that it is meant to be started and completed in the month of November, and editing comes in December. It doesn't seem fair to submit ...

This piece isn't a poem. It was posted under "Romantic Fiction."

So, you're saying it's wrong to complain? But your post was a complaint. You wouldn't be a little hypocritical, would you?

thanks Flemzo and Gadi As for you, Andrew... how the hell could you assume "Kyle" is a girl with all the references to him being a "him"??

Lesbians...? I don't know where you got "Lesbians" from, since Hayley is the only girl in the piece...