Lollipopper

Hey, funkypanda. I like the name. Overall, this story was okay. It was quite depressing and deprived of life. I could see it turning into something a lot bigger with ...

Hi again:) Great job on this! You're writing improved by ten-fold in just one chapter. Plenty of description! The only two things I could pick out was that it is ...

Hola senorita! Sorry it took so long :/ Okay, dang...must I say, I'm loving your style of writing. Descriptive, elaborate--but still clear. And this story is so fricken feels like ...

Hey, lovethelife! Thanks for sharing this piece with us. Usually I don't do romance, but once in a while, a girl has to cave in. Who doesn't like beautiful angel-like ...

Hey beginningtowrite! Thanks for the story! Overall, I like the idea of this. Mysterious guy, feuding friends...Please continue with this! Just a couple things: To me it seemed like this ...

Hey, Cairo! Back again as I promised:) Okay, wow! This was great. Diego is really funny. I love his character already forming. I also like the mystery of this all. ...

Hello, xoCairo! Thanks for posting this. I love fantasy stories. I don't like to get down to the nitty-gritty, I just like the plain overview. Here goes-- I think this ...

Hey, sorry Ranger...I'm a little late. First, this part isn't one to be ashamed of. Not even close. You did what was needed--get out quite a bit of information. I ...

Holy whoa, dude! This is so cool! You made such a simple job (writing) sound so deep. Deep thinking there--that's definitely something to be proud of. Good way to start ...

Hello, Ranger Hawk:) Thank you for PMing me! I'm surprised at how quickly you wrote this. Gahaha. I'm gonna sound like such a kiss up. This was very good! Brava! ...

Exactly as I suspected. Marvelous:) From my before post, this writing is very vivid and humorous. Besides that, I was expecting the story to be cliche or something, but it ...

Ahaha...RG, I loved it! Absolutely loved it! No negative criticism here--doesn't need any. Your writing puts such a strong image into the readers mind and I feel like the character's ...

Hey, Angel-Symphony, and Merry Christmas Eve!:) Okay, must I say, I did not lose interest in this once. It was a gorgeous piece of art, perfectly paced and painted. Many ...

Wow, this was cool. I have to say--it was good.The setting was great, and the overall idea latches your attention. But with good comes bad. I found quite a few ...

Ooh this is really good! It makes the reader thirst for more. But just two things I am notifying you of: First: the title of the school was a little ...