Lollipop

Hee hee! Actually, I loved the last line! The rest of the song was really good too!

The Darren Shan Saga rocks! I love the ons that take place at Vampire mountain and the tenth one. The Lake of souls!! Hee

Wow!! That was fun to read!

Heehee! This is good! I feed my food to the animals when I don't like it!

Yes I think you should put an age plus for this. But I agree with the others, it's amazing!!!!^_^ :D

Heehee! This is good but I think it would be better if it was longer!!

Heehee! This poem has good imigary! But if I were you, I would capitilize your "i"s. Makes it sound more poemish! Great work though! :D ~Lollipop~

OHHHHHHHH! Scaweeee! Good cliffhanger! ~Lollipop~

Hey thanks GriffenKeeper. I think I'll use your re-write on thw whip bit.! And I'll change my mistakes.

OMG! That is sooooo great. I love it. Its funny ~Lollipop~

OMG!!! I think this is a beautiful poem. Its exppresive but also gives you a good image in your head of what's going on! Well done!! ~Lollipop~

Cool! Maybe we think alike! ~Lollipop~

Wow I loved this. I liked the conversation between Karen and her boss. Naughty language!

Fanks Emma!!! ~Lollipop~

Yes I agree with Liz. It's really good. I don't have any critiques. I'm not a good critic. :D ~Lollipop~