Lollipop

Hey there. Welcome to the YWS!!!! :D This is a good prologue. I kept me hooked and I can't wait for the full story, I think it'll be great!. I ...

Hey hey! I really liked this. I thought it was a good first chapter with a great ciffhanger at the end. One thing though: You seem to use Felicity's name ...

OOH! Is that the guy that you fancy? The one that was in the band at school? I bet it is! hehe Anyway, I liked his because I can relate ...

Heehee Since you commented on my stroy I'll comment on yours It was a tricky problem, and he wished his good friend Cullun, the King of the Night Riders, a ...

:shock: I don't know why, but I felt as though I was in a trance when I red this story. I just red on and on. Yeah! This was really ...

WOW! I liked this. I agree with Sureal, definetely got potential :D One small thing though: She took her favorite coat and matching hat and rushed out the door; suitcase ...

Wow..I really enjoyed reading this story. Just a couple of mistakes though Matt thanked Mallum and took a look around downstairs. He toyed with the idea of going strait to ...

Ahhhh! Good cliffhanger! This story is really good. It's soooo sad!!! :cry: :cry: :cry: I already told you the critz on msn and I see that you fixed them :D ...

OHHH! I liked this!! So emotional. A couple of things: Warmth is what is seek I didn't get this line. It didn't make sense. Is it meant to be Warmth ...

Good although you need aspace between a full stop and a new sentence eg:He is playing. He is happy. see the full space. hee! lulaby Isn't lullaby spelt with two ...

Hmm...it's ok I guess but I think it's not very original and it's a little cliche. Its You need an apostrophe between the "t" and "s" Because thats the most ...

OMG!!! It's soo beautiful. I feel like crying. It's so sad! :cry: It's reallly good though! Just one thing bacame Just a little typo. I thought I might point that ...

This a really good prologue in my opinion. It describes the plot very well. I just have to learn how to pronounce the names. Anyway, well done! ~Lollipop~ :D

I thought this was excellent. Very realistic!! You managed to concentrate on all the little details which gave it the finishing touch. Good twist at the end too! :D ~Lollipop~

awww! This is soooo sad! I liked this peom especially this bit he will belong in my heart forever Keep writing! :D :D