Published May 4, 2005
Shh,here the wind whisper
Its so soft and gentle,
the trees waving so slowly and swiftly.
Walking through the leaves and twigs
Crick crack the twigs snap
in the silence.
Quietly move through the forest
But dont make a noise,
You want to hear the wind whisper
Because thats the most beautiful the forest.
By Mhairi Wilson (hope you like it but its nothing special)
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not sre whether i liked this or not....i'm not sure about the 'crick crack the twigs sanp' it might just be me but it didn't sound right.
One other thing this doesn't make sense
How can something be moving slowly and swiftly at the same time. Fast and slow? Hmm...
~Lollipop~
I agree, kind of a cliche.
this should be "hear" if you want the verb, or "whispers" if you want to say that the wind whispers somewhere. Just put an apostrophe (that's what it's called, lol) between the "don't! on the second to last line and you're done.
sorry if i was harsh on ya- xx
Yeah its good, though mind the spelling mistakes
Hmm...it's ok I guess but I think it's not very original and it's a little cliche.
You need an apostrophe between the "t" and "s"
I didn't get this line. It should be
"Because it's the most beautiful thing in the forest"
Plus you need a space between beautiful and of and you spelt forest wrong
Sorry if I was too harsh but I figured it might help you in future work!
~Lollipop~