Liz

I like it...but it does seem a bit bland.

emotion_less: No, it's not obvious at all! Basically I have 13 poems for each day before I went to France last year. Each one reflects what was going on that ...

Yeah, definitely expand it and you'll have a really interesting piece.

Great, I really like the concept, it's really understandable. It was well-written, very original. What Nate pointed out in the second stanza would really help to be fixed up, but ...

Great. There's the occassional grammatical error but the concept was really good and it was very well-written. I especially like the symbollism: city environment entwined with the idea of a ...

Short and sweet. Good work.

I like it, you conveyed the emotion really well. However, you need to be careful about the old cliches. Try to add a bit more originality, but overall it's pretty ...

Good concept, everyone can completely relate. Just expand on it, make it a little more interesting, because at the moment it's just a rambling pile of swear words. Which can ...

You've got the emotions, but it was smothered in cliches. Originality is the key.

Ah, wow. Great, original and simple to understand. I was everywhere you mentioned and feeling everything you felt. Good work.

Haha, I love both parts. I agree that the format is cool and really works for this style of poem. My only complaint was the few extra-long lines, it kind ...

Not the most original of ideas but that was completely overriden by the fact that you portayed it so uniquely. You captured the scene, the emotion, everything really well. Good ...

Great concept. You told it in a very clear tone, and the style was so simple which made it easy to read and the message apparent and powerful. Last line ...

Beautiful, especially the imagery. There was some dodgy line breakage, but overall I really liked it. Nice work.

I really like it. Personal and yet universal. Cool title and original images and analogies. Good work.