Liz

Good, I like it. I thought that the "ah" might be a little out of place, but overall, good concept and very well-written.

Thanks for the comment. It's not specifically about dolls, but you're definitely getting the right idea. I wrote this after going to Disneyland Paris and it's just about the loss ...

Great work. Yep, a few typos but that doesn't matter. I really enjoyed the original idea and your fresh way of writing. Keep it up.

Well. :D. Funny.

Beautiful. I love the atmosphere. Well done.

Not bad, but I think you need to condense it a little, make it more succint. I also think the "Cheesy" in the second stanza didn't quite fit in, so ...

Yep, great idea and very well-written! Nice job.

Beautifully written, and definitely gripping. I didn't completely understand it, but I think a few more readings will help, and that only adds to the atmosphere and power of the ...

I like it. I wouldn't say it's great literature, but it certainly is fitting for a Fathers' Day poem. Good work.

Not bad. Definitely work on the structure. I thought the last stanza's content was good, apart from that it seemed like I'd read it before. So, a little more originality, ...

Great. Good concept, very well-written. Nice work.

Beautiful. There's the occassional awkward line, such as "I stopped eating because I slept when I should eat, or thought about sleeping when I should have been eating." But apart ...

Good. I found it a bit inconsistent, but overall it was well-written with a god concept. You may want to fix up some grammatical errors, but apart from that, nice ...

Great, especially the ending. I like the concept and the rich description. Only suggestion would be to either take out or change the "No," in the third stanza. It doesn't ...

I like it. Very abstract, but somehow musical. The only problem seemed to be line 8, which was far too long to fit the rhythm of the poem. Apart from ...