Liz

Mmm, not too poetic. For a subject like this, which has been done many times before, you've got to create characters we really care about, or the emotion is too ...

Quite good, if a little stale. I just found that there wasn't much meat to it, so by the time the ending came, I didn't care too much. It doesn't ...

Good stuff. You've got a nice solid idea which is always a great starting place! I did feel that it was in some ways over-written though. The first stanza does ...

Not bad at all. Your rhyme and rhythm was reasonably consistent throughout and a lot of your ideas were original. WHat you need to work on is structure and punctuation. ...

This isn't poetry. I'm not saying it couldn't be, but at the moment it's not. So it needs redrafting (and a lot of it). Where's your rhythm? It's just a ...

Not bad. The main thing I'd like to suggest is that you make it more unique and write about your own personal, detailed experience. At the moment I see a ...

I'm impressed. The subject probably wouldn't grab me, normally, but here you make it work. Really work. There were a few things that stood out to me. Firstly, punctuation, but ...

Good stuff, powerful content and generally very well expressed! Some of your images really stood out in my mind and for the most part your rhyming works well, which is ...

Definitely you get a 10/10 for content. Some witty ideas in here about the different aspects of being 'lost.' But I did feel somewhat overwhelmed by the vague, overloaded words ...

I could really hear your voice and tone, so nice work on that. What I heard your voice speaking about was cliches, cliches, cliches. How many times have I read ...

This poem tore me. Half of it was really quite original, and I felt what you were writing about. Half of it was really over-the-top sickly sweet cliched stuff. But ...

Reasonable, but so obvious & direct I felt like you were shoving your message down my throat. They live in Russia. You don't really need to tell us that. Show ...

Repetition can really really work but first you have to think about the purpose of it. Here it just lengthens the poem. You really need to condense your work. You ...

Good content, but I felt like it was incomplete. It was flimsy in the sense that I felt like it could have been great, but it was executed in a ...

Generally love your content, though I had to read it a couple of times to get a firm grip on it which I think had a lot to do with ...