LiptonCookie

Okay...Doctor Who is wonderful, glad to see some beautiful Whovian stuff being posted on here ^^ Anyways...onto the review! I see this is written in second person as if we ...

This, once I clicked it, gave me the vibes that this would be somewhat deep. In a sense it is, but like I say to other poets, try to use ...

I feel that in order to improve, because there's always room for improvement, that you need to come on strong with your introductions to chapters. This, especially being the first ...

You certainly got my attention from the start. It's well-written and I love the writing style. You definitely put effort into this. You gave good details about the world which ...

It's off to a great start! It sounds promising and interesting thus far. The metaphor you used in the beginning was attention grabbing being that this is the first chapter. ...

Helllllooooo, I'm LiptonCookie, ready to review this. Firstly, I agree with ConverseFireGirl. You do have small grammatical errors here and there, refer to her review to see the content specifically. ...