LilyReagan

Hmm. I'm not sure about this one. Out of ten, I'd give it a five. Not because it was bad , but because it had no depth. It just seemed ...

You are supposed to review before you post anything, so your review:post ratio is 2:1. No matter. This is a very dark poem. Especially if you are already sad. *shivers* ...

Whoa, baby. Internet predators are bad, and you took it to the next level. At first I thought Holly_Sock would be the predator, but no.... You tricked me! Write more. ...

Well. *scratches head* It seems like you've got an addiction to not capitalizing the first words in sentences. I don't want to hurt your feelings, but, honey...that was a disaster ...

I feel totally lame with this super-dee-duper short post, but I LOVED it. Hehe. I like the concept, though at first it seemed...too Cinderella-y.... You know? But, I really like ...

Hmm. Well, it's very short and sweet..... But to the point? I suppose a poem never really gets 'to the point', though.... Can’t write; The words never come. } Maybe ...

This was a beautiful retelling of my favorite Greek Myth. The version I read included no ending, so I am glad that you did. I really loved it. I couldn't ...

Hmmm. There was only one thing that caught my eye: "Credits was a certain type of money." I feel like the reader could understand this already without the explanation, so ...

For the first piece, it was good. I do agree with clograbby that you should probably use pronouns. It appears redundant. I, who am usually not a fan of space-epics ...

Loved it! The poem flowed so very well, and your verse was beautiful. There's relly nothing I can critique on that hasn't been mentioned my another one of your adoring ...

OOH! Okay, I do agree, that for a first pst, this was short, but it was the prologue. Not to appear rebellious, but Night Mistress can tell us the name ...

I liked it. I don't understand what's making the narrator feel this way, but it's not like the poem leaves me in the dark. I liked this especially: [quote=Ringo_rules987]Denude my ...

Whoa. Um, was that short or was that short? I would suggest lengthening it, or starting from scratch with the same...theme...I guess. I love poems about Angels, especially pretty ones, ...

Very pretty. You should write Realistic Fiction. You seem very good for it. It would be better split up, though.... :D Fiendishly, Lily

Wow, I thought this was really good. My sister just had a little baby girl, Alexia Valeria, and I showed her this. She was moved to tears. I hope you ...