Wet Flowers

great job !
i guess the you started with a little fidgeting but recovered down the way!
its lovely to read something like that because it reminds of love lives of people!

hmmm.....I liked this one. In the first few verses it was kind of choppy
and didn't seem right. But the rest flowed really well. It was a well written poem, and made a lot of sense. But its sad that that kind of thing only happens in poems of movies...most of the time. This poem could even go farther Linds. You could make a story of it and you write really well.
Great job Linds.
By the way, my favorite part was the last two paragraph (like) part!

Loved it!

The poem flowed so very well, and your verse was beautiful. There's relly nothing I can critique on that hasn't been mentioned my another one of your adoring fans...

Keep it up, dude!

~Lily~

Generally, this was a great poem, there're just a few things you're missing:

Don't repeat yourself so much, it's quite distracting.

Use more vivid and descriptive words rather than short, common ones.

Don't use so many question marks, and correct the grammatical and punctuations errors. It's rather difficult to read.

All in all, 4 out of 5 stars.

So this is cool. In some serious need of punctuation- but I liked it nonetheless. The other responses coupled with mine show how much we cared about the speaker, because it had a believable and unwavering voice the whole way through. Just be careful about your word choices. This, for example:

Would you stroke my face and say

Awesome! really enjoyed it. : D

The first couple verses I wasn't that found of. The ending surprised me. If this person is so unsure about the other, how can the other be so close? It needs to be a bit longer to explain that. Other than those few things, I liked it.

I loved this poem. It was sweet, simple, and showed a great example of young love. I think the title was fabulous and the whole idea of wet flowers. I also liked the fact of not being sure and taking a risk in love.
My favorite part:

Your hair was drenched
And so were the flowers in your hand
I walked up to you
And looked questioningly at you

You just pushed the wet flowers at me
"Take them." You begged
"Please take them and tell me you love me."
I smiled and said "I love you."

This is extremely cute!

Good job, I love it.



Oh, and I agree with Sohini, Wet Flowers is really a perfect title. Plus it caught my attention. Kudos to you.

Keep writing!

~Mateeah

Great job! I loved this! :)

Too bad only those things only happen in movies and in poetry. But, I liked it anyway.

I really enjoyed this. This seems like you're wanting to be with the perfect guy. The one you truely love. I really thought it was a sweet and well done poem.

Love ya,

-Rick

I really liked this Linds. I loved the ending it was sensitive and sweet. Something every girl wishes would happen to her. I liked it, and no I didn't find anything wrong with it. Keep writing.

-Max

The first part seems a bit cliched, there are so many poems and love songs of this type.

But from stanza 4, things are better. Although, I think this poem is unnecessarily long, as the main part is really in the last 4 stanzas.

Also, you haven't punctuated the poem enough. Maybe you should put something more about the wet flowers, else the title seems vague. Wet Flowers, by the way, is a grand title.

I really liked this, it was really easy to read and the ending was great.

great job.

kim