Lilith

woooo! I got creative and spent the evening putting together my first youtube video...based on this short story. I posted it about *looks at watch* 5 minuets ago but I ...

patience_isnt ~I just wanted to say that I fixed the question mark problems. I actually remembered that I didn't end the last line with a question mark while I was ...

Okay, I'm really shocked to see that people are still reading this after almost 4 months. That's amazing. And I want to thank everyone for their helpful and encouraging comments. ...

springrain2693 ~Hey, thank you, just thought I'd mention again that Chapter Two is in the works and I've take all of the comments from above and hopefully improved greatly.

Jay ~I just wanna say thanks for the comment. For a second, I thought no one was going to comment. I just wanted to answer really simply, when you asked ...

Jay ~I just wanna say thanks for the comment. For a second, I thought no one was going to comment. I just wanted to answer really simply, when you asked ...

First of all, thank you to everyone who read this. Your advice has been wonderful. Second, to Sleeping Valor, the story will actually be told from several different points of ...

First off, i want to say thanks since at first, i figured no one would even read this but yeah. Now on to my main reason for this little post. ...

This is just amazing and I love it. I wish i read more of your stuff now. But really, i loved it.

mya see, ya go talent kid. There are some punctuation problems but nothing a second or third read through can't fix. keep it up and write more.

stobe lights are those flashing lights. they blink. make me dizzy.

Its definately well put together. I like it. Then again, I'm not to into poetry but I love poems that don't rythm. Don't know why. I like it though. :D

I sued Colorado 'Cause you know, I think it looks a little bit too much Like Wyoming Now I like that one. Funny like a bunny. good peice and it ...

You definately need to cut down on the number of times you write woman, seriously. And it definately needs to be thesaurused. Find some knew words and widen your vocabulary. ...

Your right about the exlamation points. I don't like to have to shout when I read to my cousins. Then again, its not the best thing to do, read four ...