LilPWilly

Dang bro The first lines had me. Why worry about losing something when you never tried embracing it. This poem is just good advice. I wonder, what is the bottle ...

The flow is tight, tone consistent, and the imagery slaps. “The cold love of winter” You seem to have a bit of a parallelism, maybe chiasmus, with the first and ...

I can tell this is really you. not feeling is second nature it's the only way i know how to live "tell someone" but they never understand Not anymore. I ...

I really like the first one. I think it touches more on pure aspects of love, like “promising a great future” or “all, simply for your sake.” The other one ...

Muy bueno This poem has a bounce, but maybe that’s just cause I’m also listening to bouncy music rn As a lyricist this is kind of smooth. With just a ...

You might expect an uplifting review, but the first thing I have to say to you is you’re wrong. You don’t take what you can get. I wish I could ...

Frick. This is heartbreaking. I too am pasty dough, even though ima quarter Mexican. The imagery is spot on I love how you manipulate the same subject to create 20 ...

Bars—you could turn this into a rap I love the emotional impact Try this on for size Sometimes I write my poetry with no rhythm I like my motives with ...