LeoPenrhythm

Nice writing...But to be honest, couldn't connect with your poem (If you wanted me to)...Because i felt that the flow is broken in the middle of the lines..I love this ...

Good job....Honestly, I don't remember coming across any such poem (based on the idea of one word) in my school days...Your choice of the word was good, but I think ...

Your style gives me tiny vestiges of kafka's...Short, direct and served right into our hands ( here eyes of course)...The succinct manner of your story is quite remarkable...The whole thing ...

Hello there!!!! Good attempt I would say...But to be honest..There are some lines which I found needs wonder, it is a good poem, but just a titbit of improvement can ...

Good Job....Simple lines with a good rhyme.....The place that I found quite disturbing is the third line in the second stanza..."I'm beginning to tear/ Pulled apart by the seams" , ...

Hey!!!!!!! Good attempt...went through the thing on the link...quite appreciable.... "Please,no rose needed dear, just come near, and never fear." Love this love, what you actually need is no laud ...