Leja

You really needn't call attention to the fact that this is an acrostic poem. I'd get rid of the bold letters and probably make at least some of them lowercased ...

It was too straightforward for my tastes. By the end there was nothing to figure out because, especially, of the lines: We must find hope again The light within each ...

Personally, I think it sounds like you're sleepwalking through life, though that doesn't really fit the answer of an object or place. And then I thought school, but I'm associating ...

She was gormless, unfulfilled. Is gormless a word? If not, you should check this whole paragraph for typos because there were one or two others. “You like ice don’t you? ...

she made my mind from pulled-out concert cassettes Nice ^.^ Who disbelieves their creator? But I've seen the drawings tucked in with Da Vinci's [my favorite] and my insides are ...

filtered our skins through subtle weed-green sidewalk cracks I liked these lines a lot. In fact, I really liked the language of the whole poem; I thought it was well ...

“What if we give him something to write with? Have you tried to giving him a pen?” “Nah.” “We should give him a pen.” “Yeah.” Out of context, this part ...

Once Tess had bought another drink - which had been almost disappointingly easy; even though she was only sixteen, and looked it, the bartender had had no qualms about selling ...

Of Sanity; Insanity’s slave, That clung to Earth’s craggy surface. Tortu r ously tearing through my mind, I'm not sure whether you or the earth are being metaphored (yes, probably ...

I thought that the rhyming was funny. The general ~storyline didn't say too much; presumably the person it's written about has a foul temper and just walks away when something ...

It went in a lot of different directions. You have pollution, chess stuff, drowning/water, and tattoo images, but they don't seem to really connect, and it's stronger if they do. ...

The last line was cute. I'd expand a bit on the first part so that the second part and especially the ending is more meaningful. “I can’t take this anymore; ...

I think that the biggest problem with this is that there is no attempt to present anything other than what's on the surface. There's no concentration on word choice; there's ...

The dialogue bits were a little confusing; maybe you could italicize those to be clearer? Lightning's weaving 'cross the sky, and I am silent, for I have no answer; where ...

Could he take medicines, then? Yes, but it was part of his sickness that he didn’t want to. The second sentence didn't make much sense. When my grades began to ...