Leja

I really like the form you picked here; the structure and heraldry is cool to introduce a new baby, but keep up the same energy throughout the poem. I like ...

I have a confession to make. I was going to be a bad reader and skim through the first stanza and not comment, but then I actually started reading, and ...

I'm confused. I feel like I'm playing connect the dots when I should be painting by numbers. That is, you as the writer should make the initial connections between ideas, ...

on fires, and glowing orange fibers dance across your fingers like elastic bands, like lovelovelovelove. I'm sorry, that's not a very helpful way to start a review. But it's just ...

First, a brief non-critique: I think that part of why this hasn't gotten many responses is because you began by telling us that it's written to work out some feelings. ...

As a whole, I think you have a really good start here, it just needs a little solidifying. This could totally just be me, but I can't stand the word ...

This poem, though little, does its job well. The rhythm works and the rhyme isn't overdone. In that sense, good work! I do have questions about a few aspects of ...

I don't really have any idea of what's going on here, other than that it's about the grim reaper? Work on the rhythm of certain lines so that they flow ...

Reading through this the first time, I felt like there were almost too many words, like things were said more properly than they needed to be. Watch out for archaic ...

This was a very interesting poem to read, mostly because for a little while, I wasn't quite sure what to make of it, seeing things running out in every which ...

There's lots of good stuff going on here.I like how you kept the same tone throughout the poem and there was a nice mix of concrete images (a heart lying ...

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He showed you how to gently pull at the luminous threads of your soul to loosen it. This line made the poem for me. Prior to that, it had been ...

First off, I really really like the way you started this, with the vague question as the first line ^_^ From the first stanza on, I wanted to read this ...

These are all things we've heard before, just in a list. Why are they more important for this poem? What has changed about them? Look into the subjects a little ...