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Re: Runes of wonderland
Hello MrSanzHatter, and welcome to YWS!! I ~love~ it here and hopefully, you will too! This is Laurenlovely for a ~l
Oct 18, 2017 -
Re: Gone
Hi Rodger! What a sad piece, and I feel it really describes being heartbroken! Good job. Now there are a few nitpicks... "a day where l would feel as if ...
Oct 2, 2017 -
Re: My son. Part 1
Wow, sad piece. But there are some nitpicks. Like everyone else said please capitalize all of the "i's." Don't forget to add commas as well. "My son, Abraham is a ...
Sep 30, 2017 -
Re: If Only
Nice work, but I have to point out some grammar issues... Remember, all ("i's") are supposed to be capital like this, ("I") no matter what. So all your sentences with ...
Sep 21, 2017 -
Re: Apocalypse-(Horror Zombie Story)
Wow, this is a good story! But since I'm here I would also like to point out the part where her mother dies. Giving a slight kiss on the cheek ...
Sep 21, 2017 -
Re: The Watcher / Part One
Hey LittleFox! Wow! This is amazing! Reading it sent chills down my spine. (in a good way :D) I just have a few things i would like to point out... ...
Sep 20, 2017 -
Re: Dear Stranger......I think i love u
Amazing poetry, but you must focus on adding things, such as on the second to last line you said "No matter short out times together were" you forgot to add ...
Sep 15, 2017