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Yeah, I guess the mother's death was not explained fully enough. The father was meant to have got some kind of fever (a man used to England will often not ...

Thanks, Luvzi12, that was a super-considerate crit. :D I see I've made a horrendous amount of typos - and yet I want to be a proof-reader when I'm older. Hmmph. ...

Thank you, Demeter. Nice to see you again. The more times I read this, I see further weakness it in. I'm glad that you liked it... but it's wierd when ...

Okay, thanks both of you. GML: Thank you for your critique. I'm glad I portrayed the emotion without getting too clouded to write with clarity. I will probably lose that ...

Hey, thanks for lending some time to critique, chocoholic! I'm not really sure if this should be in Other Fiction I know. My Bad. Thing is, I didn't want it ...

Thanks for the critique, Sam. I understand I got a tad too carried away with the dialogue and left the setting and characters a bit on the threadbare side. It's ...

Thanks for the review, scasha. Thing is, with the whole 'what her master'd given her' and the like, it's meant to not sound proper-English. I thought that if I'd narrated ...

I don't understand... you're confused? Two say it's confusing, the others don't. Surely, for what it is, you can critique? Pretty pointless comment, Thea! Oh well. P.S. Stop putting yourself ...

Yeah, conventinoally a mystery book, but it's all about the human nature and the affects of choices made earlier on. It's... brilliant!

Ah, thank you, Sapphire, you are too kind :D Yes the 'content with other people's feelings' is something I am sure relates to many people. In that aspect, I suppose ...

Thanks, salsashanno - your review was most encouraging. It wasn't awful in the least - compliments work just as well :D

Thank you both; you are both very kind :D To ashleylee: Markus is the man who wrote the letter. He wrote it to Sybil, who is the one that cries ...

Ah, thank 'ee, Thea. With regards to the age thing, I'm pretty sure I hinted; I'm sure I said she was twenty... I shall check that. Later. Anyway, thanks for ...

Hi, Bittersweet. I liked this immensely. It was delicate and intruiging, sad and poetic without falling into depressing. In a way, it was reasonably uplifting. Kudos to you! L

Sorry, I'm new here: are you allowed to quote a critiquer? :? Obviously – being American – you have spelt colour wrong. Is it wrong? Surely it's just a variation? ...