Laradear

This may be a first draft, but it's very good. There were a ton of really long sentences, though, and I recommend shortening them or separating them. There were a ...

This is a very intriguing rap. It doesn't go into specifics, which is always good when reaching out to a larger audience, but it doesn't become to vague. Your use ...

Oh wow. Such meaning. Destroying an being destroyed. If you would like help with your stanza's the best I can give is to group them together based on relation of ...

That was both heart-wrenching and funny. I really loved the way you described this love following her throughout her life and how she always came back to the boy she ...

Oh wow, this was excellent! I absolutely love the way you worded this and the way you presented the story made it project into my mind like a movie. I ...

I'm so confused I want to know more. Is his fear a fear of love? It's obvious he's a spy because you stated so, and that he wants other spies ...

This is a very well written story. It has kept me on the edge of my seat what with the references to Toby having a heart attack from his sister. ...