LadyBug

I love it! The plot progressed without flaw and I'm super curious to see what happens to Lily and I can't wait to see more of this in the future

This does make perfect sense. Thank you for taking the time to leave a review! I appreciate it.

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The description and action is breathtaking! It is definitely better now that you have reviewed it. My favorite character by far is Roth, I can so relate to her. I ...

I meant for her to say really long so it would sound suspicious. It was supposed to show how clueless James is. I know paragraph 4 is super long, too. ...

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I enjoyed this and I would HATE if that happened to me. I think the story really flowed (other than a few choppy sentences I saw) and I don't know ...

I am going to do a part two, I am glad you liked part one. Thank you for the pointers and to clear up Pearl's feelings: She hates him but ...

Thank you for the helpful review, I will be sure to add more detail and keep the backstory more mysterious in my future works. :)

Exactly!

There are a few, yes. But it was so good that the mistakes didn't matter

I originally wanted this to just be a short story but I do have ideas for a part 2. Thank you for the review, too! I will use what you ...

Very nice! I saw a few spelling mistakes but I loved how much detail you put into this. I can tell you've spent a lot of time on it. Keep ...

Very nice! I saw a few spelling mistakes but I loved how much detail you put into this. I can tell you've spent a lot of time on it. Keep ...

Thank you for the glowing review. I'd love to check out your newest post!