LJM368

Hi, Lilly here to review your work. I really really loved your poem! It was well written (rare, for most of the poems I read), and I totally and completely ...

Wow. Just . . . wow. That was extremely powerful. You really captured the raw emotion of this girl who was hurting badly enough to commit suicide (which is what ...

First off, I thought this was great. The simplicity from the view of a kid in elementary school is really captured, especially in the way he describes Mrs. Baxley. Though ...

I thought this was a beautiful poem that really captured the essence of what you were speaking about. Some of the lines reminded me of the song Innocence, by Avril ...

Very beautiful. Had the feel of a song more than a poem for me, but that might just be because I'm listening to the Tangled soundtrack. :P I can picture ...

Wow...welcome to Creepsville, enjoy your stay. The sadistic demons are especially friendly. I have to admit, this isn't the kind of thing I normally read. Demons and spirits just aren't ...

Sad. Breathtaking. Realistic. And absolutely beautiful. The repeating of the word 'evermore' at the end reminded me a bit too much of The Raven, but other than that it was ...

Holy f*ck, that was creepy. I've tried writing things like this before and could never really do it right, but you got it spot on. The description of her life ...

Wow, that was really eerie. I liked the repeated statement 'All that mattered were those eyes.' It definitely emphasized that something in the MC snapped when she saw the eyes. ...