Kylan

Hey there Jabber! Here's my payback for all of your helpful critiques! I liked this. Your style and characters are very contagious. You manage to both keep me interested and ...

You definitely have a beautiful writing style. Your writing manages to capture an entire scene and drag the reader into it and hold them tight until the very end (how's ...

Could one of you wonderful mods move this to Other Fiction or Scripts please? Whichever it fits better in. Thanks! -Kylan

Thanks everyone! I will take everyones advice into consideration. I whipped this up in roughly 20 minutes, so it is a rough draft. Cadmium>> Yes, the 'companion' is the gun ...

Thanks Jabber! And yes, your crits ALWAYS help. -Kylan

Meh. I only read the first and I didn't like the guy's writing style much. The story was good I suppose... -Kylan

Thanks soo much Jabber. I'm glad you caught some of those things. And yeah, that fragment thing is kinda my style. Some like it, some don't. Eh. Whatever :wink: . ...

Thank you so much for the crit! It was very helpful! Did you seriously look this up? That's awesome, it shows your dedication to your story (especially if its correct) ...

Thanks! You're right. Too many -ing words. I'm off to change 'em. -Kylan

Well, I've edited this portion of TOFAB and posted the alternate ending which turned out to be infineatly better than the ending I had before. If you'd like to track ...

Really? The ending was good? I don't know... To me something is missing... I mean, it's great that I've got a thumbs up on the end, but I'm thinking of ...

Oh, I'm sooooo sorry. :oops: I didn't mean to offend anyone. Lady Pirate I'm very grateful that you even read this piece, let alone comment on it. What you did ...

Why doesn't any one want to crit this? Too long? Not well written? Someone take the time to look this over, please? :( -Kylan

That was amazing CCF! You have just gotten yourself a regular customer. -Kylan

Thank you so much!! Hope I can post the rest soon!! -Kylan