Kylan

DISCLAIMER: If this is some particular structured form, it was lost on me. I'm no good at spotting rhyming forms other than, you know, sonnets. Hey Jack, Interesting. I imagine ...

Eraqio -- Love the title. Also, I love the topic. It's a topic I've written about on many occasions. There is nothing more inherently poetic or noteworthy than the immigrant. ...

Gal -- You're quite becoming the master of the epic poem, aren't you? It's interesting, because I rarely see epic poetry in the normal venues of poetry I'm exposed to. ...

Heh. I don't think I can critique this, but it was a fun copycat of an ee cummings poem. I love all the little inside jokes you had strewn around ...

Hello, Returning the favor. Not bad, but not particularly memorable either. For starters, the nursery song you used is comparable to Psalms 23 in how overused it is in popular ...

Hello, Excellently written. And I can honestly say that in my extensive poetry reading, I have not found a poem that denounces poetry, at least not so poetically. I get ...

Hey, I didn't have a problem with the alternating perspectives. Lord knows I've done it enough myself. I've had stories where I've got three different perspectives twining in past, present, ...

Gal -- I'm not going to be overly didactic here, or long-winded. You've had many adequate critiques. Plus, I need to be somewhere in twenty minutes. This is one of ...

Kamas -- Good, not great. I'm with Navita. There's nothing wrong with it in particular, but there's nothing new or very original about it. I guess I don't come away ...

Navita -- Hey! More science poems. Seems to be a glut of these on here recently, but I can't deny that not only were you the trendsetter, but you also ...

Shepherd -- Well written, no doubt. I enjoyed this for the language you used, your point of view, the word play. Your opening line is wonderful, and your title is ...

LASER. Ha. his hand passes over the benchtop, cooled to slab of plastic, ready to dissect the movements of photons, lovetongues of light and the curved waist of the cathode ...

Good stuff! One of the hardest variants of poetry to write is the short poem. It is exceedingly difficult to be succinct, impacting, and meaningful in a few mere lines. ...

I really enjoyed this. It's been a while since I've seen a poem of this caliber on YWS! It retains a level of sophistication, without being overdrawn or over-heavy with ...

Interesting! A very frenetic piece. Darting from place to place with the heartbeat of a hummingbird. It takes a couple reads to pinpoint the momentum and position of the meaning, ...