Kylan

Conrad - This was better than what you had written previously. You had much more action, much more conflict, and reasonable dialogue. However, I must be truthful with you, because ...

Okay. This was good. Definately a different writing style, but effective and solid as Conrad pointed out. It's one of those peices I hate to read because you leave nothing ...

Conrad - Unfortunately, I have to echo Jiggity's opening paragraph. You really didn't do much with this. I had really high expectations for part two, but instead all I found ...

Conrad - Superb. I enjoyed this piece supremely. It showed maturity and grace and wit: a perfect showcase of your skills and a perfect hook for a story that will ...

Jared - I'm very pleased you decided to post this. Once again, you've managed to structure a realistic and eerie situation and, what's more, you added a very mature twist ...

Bickazer - There's an unwritten YWS etiquette that stories should only be posted in increments of two thousand words or so. In the future, I suggest you stick to that ...

Gryph - Very nicely executed. I enjoyed this installment, but as usual, you don't give me much to actually critique. With this kind of story, it's hard to direct you ...

Order was ordure, it was shit. Rules made by foul fellows floundering in their filth. Dualities were found in all. Discipline was simply the lack of anarchy. The truth was ...

sorry to say, but i'm going to have to return your ring. it's nothing personal, except that i cant do a thing with my finger & it's already beginning to ...

Angel - An intriguing start! This certaintly looks like a hefty piece of competition. You have a wonderful way of blending the beautiful with the grotesque. [Every Little Piece] Your ...

Suz - I'm finally getting to this. And I'm glad I did, as usual. This was a solid piece, although I'm not sure what the significance of it was. Once ...

Wiseman - For the most part, this was a pleasant poem. It has a good message expressed using calm and soothing language. It wasn't phenomenal, but it does deserve a ...

Conrad - I liked this. Gene candy is an interesting concept, although I don't see how it would ever work in reality. So I've gottat say that when you're writing ...

Jared - This was interesting. It was well written, gave me wonderful insights into your character's psyche, and you managed to get the point across without telling too much. This ...

Hello there! Can you tell how old they are? Like, are their ages clear? I'm guessing they're in their mid-thirties to forties, but I have a feeling you were intending ...