Krystalstars

Ignore the guy @ the top.... This was AWESOME! I want to see more from you, more stuff like this. The message is awesome

Krystalstars-- The narrator is self-obsessed and boring. I doubt if a revision that does not include starting over will be worthwhile. Take some time. Step away from writing and read. ...

Ok, you said you've corrected the spelling errors so I'll give it another go... Chapter 1: Jordan and Misty are best friends and also Witches attending Witches doesn't need to ...

Ok. I'll try

CHAPTER 2 ________________________________________ "Three coppers....it's a lot but oh' well." Murmurs went about the small kitchen hold. Tom-cat sat in a corner by the table, watching the ship's capt

I just fixed it! :D *happy dance* Now read it...

JUST corrected the errors!

I'm so glad you liked it! Sorry about the spelling...... If i could just get the correct spelling?

Yeah! Thanks shaf! BTW, I like nicknames! Specaly mine... :D (Spelling on purpose...) As for the boring chapter...sorry about that but the next one will reviel more.

Probably not...when it comes to grammar I suck......

I'll go back and fix this stuff when I have time. Um.....what's a semicolon? And how the heack to I italsize?

CHAPTER 4 ___ _________________________ "I can't believe you." Jordan was saying, she and Misty were in the Griffindor common room. Each in a armchair with smiles on they're faces and ...

I dunno, I think the prolouge is the hook.

Thank you all for the wonderful tips, I will be working on these chapters for a while so keep checking back. As for some of my "Carless mistakes." Well....I have ...

Problem: That no one has gaven me before Problem fixed: That no one has given me before Over all tho it was VERY good!