I Can't Wait Forever

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"I Can't Wait Forever"
By: Lisa (©LC Sounds)

You've been giving me these looks
That no one has [s]gaven[/s] given me before
You always seem to help me out
When[s]ever[/s] I'm in need
My friends say we should go out
[s]My friends[/s] they say we would make a cute couple
Then if you like me
Why [s]won't[/s] don't you ask me out?

Chorus:
You say you will in your own time
But I can't wait [s]around [/s]forever
I like you and you like me
I really want to know if this is real
Or just some [s]silly[/s] childish crush
But I can't wait [s]around[/s] forever
Just so you can get some courage

Don't know what to do
Don't even know what we are
Are we friends or are we more?
Should I become a star? (what????)
Or stay who I am?
Whatever I am will you ask me out?
And if not
Why won't you [s]ask me out[/s]?

Chorus

I want to know if I'm waiting forever
Because if I am I'm outta' here
I want to have a career
I can't when all I'm doing is waiting
I don't want to disappear
But I can't wait around for a year
Just to hear you say you want more
So why won't you ask me out?

Chorus

I'm not waiting forever
Just for a simple question
So good-bye
And [s]go[/s] get some courage

It was pretty well-done, but not exactly the most original thing of all time. Over all good job, and sorry I suck at critiques.

Problem: That no one has gaven me before
Problem fixed: That no one has given me before

Over all tho it was VERY good!

Thanks for the comments and I made the change!

Good job

But the last chorus was not that impressing(mainly the last two lines, it sounded to be just a poem)

You've been giving me these looks
That no one has gave me before