Krupp

This sound like something my brother used to write...it's got a distinctive feel to it. I like that about it.

It might be good to enlighten those of us who aren't sure what the usage of the word 'overdraft' clearly means...I haven't a clue.

I really didn't see anything that needed to be fixed a whole this read well and, quite frankly, is one of the better poems I have seen on here...keep posting ...

Uh...sure thing. It might be a bit. I've got to work on the music first.

It's definitely a great way of putting the thoughts down on paper, the way you phrased everything... But on the other hand, it makes everything seem vague and strange. Might ...

A clever way of revealing characteristics through the eyes of another...that was truly impressive. Short and simple; to the point. It had a great ring throughout the whole piece. I ...

I haven't read King in a long time...I'll have to look this one up. King used to be my favorite author.

The last stanza threw me off, but the rest was fine.

It almost could be a freestyle if you rearranged some of ending parts of a few lines...but that's what makes this piece so inspiring. Not sure if the long lines ...

This is the best thing I've read on this forum so far...I really can't say there's anything that really needs critiquing here. Congratulations. That was one hell of a poem.

This verse didn't seem so useless to me. Maybe I'm just abstract. I haven't a clue. But it was decent to me. The only thing is that you should reconsider ...

This poem seemed scatterbrained. I couldn't really get a notion of what exactly happened. Might want to work on that.

This sounds like a good outline. I'm expecting it (some of it anyways) to get put into writing soon..

Oddly enough, this doesn't strike me as a seems more like prose. Cut down the length of every line, maybe. It just seems more prose-ish as it is.

Thanks for the critiquing. Most of my stuff is in the Other Fiction part...