Kiwisatsuma

Hey there! :) It looks like a really interesting story that's beginning here. I liked the way the conversation between the family members sounded so natural and realistic, and it'll ...

Hey! :) This was an interesting read. It's easy to think of the cold war as something distant thing that happened ages ago, and I like how you made it ...

Hey! :) This sounds like a really cool plot for a story, but I don't think it's really a prologue. It's much more like a blurb that describes in brief ...

Hey there! :) I like this and it seems like an interesting beginning to your story, but I do think there are a few things you could improve to make ...

Hey! :) Thanks for the request! Having read this through, I have to admit that I can't really think of much to say. This is well written and the plot ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS! :D I liked this, especially the way you described the little girl's feelings and the atmosphere in the apartment, and the irony of the way the ...

Hey again! :D a rich tapestry of dark reds and gold were splashed throughout It seems a bit odd to have just one tapestry going running throughout the whole castle ...

Hey! :) So, I like this, especially the description of Baira. Just a couple of nitpicks: There she was with her native village outfit, a piece of cloth tied round ...

Hey! :) Welcome to YWS! :D I like this so far. You've got a main character that a lot of people can identify with and a plot that's already getting ...

Hey! :) Well, I reviewed the first chapter ages ago, so I thought I'd come back and read the next one. And wow! I had no idea the plot was ...

Hey! :) If I could have gone into my heart that night, I would have introduced you to the ruins that Eric had left me into . I really like ...

Hey there! :) I like this, especially the way you fitted so much drama and excitement into a fairly short story. A few small nitpicky things to polish up: Towards ...

Hey there! :) This was very well written and it sounds like a fascinating setting for a story. I really hope you post more here! But while this extract certaintly ...

Hey there! Welcome to YWS! :D I really liked this, especially the description of the car wreck on the road. Still, I think there are ways you could improve it. ...

Hey! :) First off I have to say that I love the concept of this. Dogs having a conversation = bound to be awesome. :smt003 I do think that there ...