Kinsley

I originally had it without that stanza but it seemed like I had too much of chorus so I put it in there. Personally I like it better my original ...

Oh, and the Star Wars thing seemed very out of the blue to me.

Quote: Elizabeth nods her head understandingly and I can hear her guilty thoughts about bringing the subject up with Adam. ‘Could’ instead of ‘can’ or add ‘almost’ before ‘can’. Yea, ...

Becuase of editing and more changes to the story I had a need to update this. Well, it's finally updated.

Yes, that was my assignment. I was supposed to take a fairy tale and change it around so that the good guy was the bad guy (ie: How Cindy Lou ...

Oh, and by the way, you can have my personal opinion. These are the changes that I would make. It's just a suggestion so don't go and get mad at ...

Yea, that wasn't much of a critique. But I'm not the authority on this. Um, I guess I liked your poem *hesitant laugh*. But I don't get what happened in ...

Whoa

Wow, it looks like people have given you a lot of critiques. Well, overall I really liked the story and can't wait for the next installment. Hope it comes out ...

Oh don't worry. I know this poem is pretty bad right now. This is the first draft. I'll probably need about ten more :P. All I wanted to do was ...

It was very good but I don't know what to think about it. It reminds me so much of my sister. Very good though...