KingKamor

Hey, good job! I know that I don't have enough patience to write a poem that long, so I salute you! Since nothing much like this hase ever happened in ...

That was pretty damn good, Squallz. It's a little bit like my own romance story... okay, not really, but they both have rain in it! XD Anyway, I spotted some ...

Pretty good. You could do with a bit more description, like what the characters look like, and thegeneral scene everything takes place. There were also a few grammatical errors, but ...

I like the narration-- it sounds exactly like what a high school girl would put in her diary... Now I feel guilty for reading Autumn's diary... Anyway, pretty good so ...

(Sheesh, lay off the caffine, people. :? ) The beginning didn't really grab me, and it was difficult to read, since you put breaks between almost every sentence in the ...

That's a pretty good start. What got me wondering was why there's so much fighting amongst the kids in an orphanage when they generally become good friends in real life. ...

Prologue and chapter 1 critique: I enjoyed the kind of dark feeling that I got from the Prologue. All of the characters' dialogue seems to flow quite well, but there ...