Kim

i like how you write. the story flows, and is fun to read. other then a few spelling errors, this a very suspenseful and had me wanting to keep reading ...

this is awesome, this flowed and was easy to read and visualize. i love it. kim

this is going to be a great story , there are a few grammar errors, but it is the first time you have written, so that is normal, trust me ...

i am not used to reading in this form, but your story is great, i love your sensed of humour. great story. kim

i dont know much about poetry to critique. but this made me laugh. i thought it was very well done. i enjoyed reading it. bear is there nothing you cant ...

very well written, i really like it. the characters are not confusing, i found it easy to follow. great job, keep going. kim

yep,i really like this, it is intriguing and suspenseful. The chapter flows when reading, i also like the discription, i could imangine where she was. kim

i like this, and could sense where you were going, it is very good, now i am going to go keep reading, got to read the next chapter. kim

this is awesome, i actually put myself there. i have nothing negative to say. i have reread it a couple times. i love this. kim

this is really good bear, i love it, it made me laugh. i cant wait for you to add to this. awesome job. kim

wow , this was great, well written and i love the idea of the dog watching. awesome job. kim

i really like your choice of words, i could put a mental image in my mind. the emotion was also there. you did a great job. kim

i really like this, it is beautiful. the only thing you need to do is break up the paragraph alittle. great job , keep writing kim

this is great, this will be an awesome story when you are done. i really like the visual you put out there. i can put myself there as i read. ...

this is by far the best one yet bear. i love the action and suspense. you did an awesome job. there is more to come right? i sure hope so ...