KilljoyRetardedFish

I gotta say, I was really intrigued by the story. I imagine there will be more written after this? Okay, that said, let me get on with minor corrections. "her ...

This piece is great, and I found myself relating closely to the main character....up until she mentions her cuts and the medication. I didn't notice any signs that she cuts, ...

I have to admit, for an 11 year old, this is great writing. I know for sure that I would not have been able to write like this when I ...

Hey there GreenLight24! So I read your story and loved it, as a hopeless romantic I get so excited reading romance stories. It was very well written in the sense ...

Wow, a new member! Welcome to YWS, and I'll be reviewing your piece today. First off, I like the repetition, the way you ended with the beginning. You have a ...

I like how it ended in a loop (no pun intended). Well, it's very dramatic, and I could hear the arguments that were going on, mostly because I went through ...

Okay, here goes my review. I liked the story, and like reason, I think this story has enormous potential. I see what you wanted to demonstrate to the audience, but ...

I agree with Ad, you did end it a little bit abruptly. However, with the exception of that, it was well written. It made me wonder what their issues are, ...

Ahh! That was amazing! It reminded me of Demolition Lovers by My Chemical Romance (couldn't help but notice you were a fan as well

The title should be one that you come up with, if you want ideas, you could make it based off of an object that is of importance to your character. ...

It's a little bit too short, and it doesn't exactly explain much. I'm going to assume there's going to be a Chapter 2? It needs some explanation. Swallowed by light? ...

Your story is a little bit confusing to read. Try not to put a space before a comma, it comes after. She was gone dead , Burned alive I blacked ...

These lyrics are really good, the message is clear, and they are trying to let their partner know kindly. They remind me of Linkin Park's Numb, but not so harsh ...

I saw no mistakes in your writing, which is always good. The story in itself was beautiful, a man whose world ends when his wife dies. It's a topic that ...

I gotta admit...even the silly, not serious whatsoever stories that you create are amazing. I found nothing wrong with it, since I'm pretty sure everything else has already been pointed ...