Kiki

hey hun :D Nice start on your writing, but there are somethings I'd like to go over with you. 1970 was the year when Jeffrey Simpson was born. His father ...

Let me start out by saying that I love the name Rain/Rayne. It's such a beautiful name! Unfortunately for Rayne, hers wasn’t a typical circumstance. They named her Rain Sinclair ...

Wow..just wow! I love how it was written! Very well written and I loved it. And what never felt? The smooth press of hands compared, for mine are a child’s ...

Such a short poem! But for this one I think it works.

Very nice hun.. I feel the pain. I know how love hurts. Although I've learned that if it's meant to be, it will be. And if not, so what? Move ...

Wow that was intense. I like it =D Keep it up! The wording sounded right to me and it was extremely intense. And that's what rough copies are for, posting ...

Yay reviews! The grammar and everything is already done. SO I will state that I REALLY like this =D I loved how you worded the scream assaulting Imelda's ears. I ...

Wow everyone beat me to it! xD There's a lot of dialog...this could be a good or bad thing, depending on who and where it comes from. Me, in my ...

Hey hun! I really like this! The things that I noticed: “Hello, Tameri I am sorry for your lose.” Ya right everyone knows Haren and I hated each other. Lose ...

beautiful piece! Only thing I gotta say: *I'm sorry if this was a terrible read* This wasn't part of the poem right? So, let's not put it there. =D It's ...

Wow...intense O_O That's a lot of dialog. Although for this prologue I think it works. Grammar wise I cant help, I suck at grammar xD sorry... You might wanna describe ...

Very nice! It made me tear up!! I noticed though hun, you stated that Shane hated hospitals a few times in different ways. "The hospital was not busy but it ...